05-25-2009, 05:28 AM
We stood so close
to each other in the same world�
yet such a defined wall separated us�
Such a strong wall stopped us
from seeing one another�
even though we were
already different to start with�
As you are the ocean,
combined to the surface
and held such a beauty�
one that brings a gentleness
that is loved by all�
while I am nothing more
than the ever moving wind
that is free from the world,
but condemned by it at the same time�
the wind that brings
unnecessary harm and destruction
to those I grow close to�
I can only watch your grace
while you gaze through me,
my form nonexistent.

I should have known the futility
of trying to bring together
the wind and the ocean�
I still tried my best
to destroy the wall between us,
to see you once more
and tell you that I had done wrong
that we had done wrong.
I desired so much to break down
the wall that stopped my wind
that stopped me from allowing the wind
to flow over your ocean
and relax by your presence.
I wanted to tell you how sorry I am�

Day after day,
I fruitlessly attacked the wall,
hoping that my efforts
would bring me results.
But I grew troubled as I continued
to see the wall stand strongly.
I had not let the wall stop me
as I exhausted myself,
my tears splattered over the wall.
It refused to budge�
And I gave up�

My wind died down
as I faced the wall,
my tear stained eyes shut closed.
I was reduced
to such warm tears as I punched the wall�
but it cracked.
I stood there in such shock
as the wall fell
to my act of desperation
to my punch filled with such a strong desire�
And I take
my first look at you
to see you just as I left you�
I was in awe
how your grace remained unfazed
by the winds of time�
But I was stopped
at the realization
that I could not reach you
that you were now in a different world�
You were now in a land
untouched by my wind�
And I fell at last,
my eyes now staring at the wall
that keeps us apart�
I realized that it will never
go back to how it was before�
and the wind began to surround me,
wiping away my fresh tears�

Just random things I had going on when I talked to my ex-girlfriend... -shrugs- Feedback is appreciated.

05-25-2009, 05:46 AM


jewess crabcake
05-25-2009, 05:47 AM
Dude that was awesome! You should totally write more, and visit that website you'd make Bemis proud.

I think we've got another one in the brotherhood Neg!

05-25-2009, 06:08 AM
Eheheh. Truth is, I've been writing for over a year... And I have a lot more poems. I just didn't realize there was a "writing" forum here. XD

05-27-2009, 01:28 AM
That was pretty good. You should post more of your poems.

05-27-2009, 02:23 AM
Ehehe. Thanks, everybody! Looks like I will.